In this blog post I will be commenting on my peer review for Marvin Chaires. Marvin is not in my English section but instead is in the 8am section. I chose to comment on Marvin's post because he did a QRG and after project one I feel very confident in QRG's and I think I can help out at least a little in the genre convention department.
Chemical Writing in Some of Its Shapes and Sizes by Marvin Chaires
Marvin's QRG can be found here
My Comments can be found here
I selected Activity 2 as I think Marvin s on the right track in terms of genre conventions but definitely has some changes and additions to be made!
I think I helped Marvin in breaking down the genre conventions of a QRG. I thought the hardest part of making a QRG was including/remembering all of the conventions and I think stating them individually was probably helpful.
I incorporated the genre conventions that are apparent in the genre examples on d2l. After doing a QRG for our lst project I remeber having to figure out subheading, photos, hyperlinking, sidebars, and white space so I referenced that information.
His content, for being a rough draft, was spot on. He included all of the necessary information and I admire that as content is often the hardest thing for me to do. I learned that maybe if I focus more on the content and then on the conventions I might feel more confident in my project at the end.
Sunday, March 27, 2016
Peer Review for Alec Eulano
In this post I will be covering my peer review of Alec, he was a member of my group for this project and also wrote an Essay.
An Investigation of the Specificity in Political Science Genres by Alec Eulano
Alec's rough cut can be found here
My review comment can be found here
I selected activity 2 and critiqued the genre conventions that Alec used in order to convey/create a Standard college essay. I chose to do this because I felt as though his content was strong but some of the genre conventions were missing.
I think I helped Alec in refining the genre conventions that are so easy to overlook. When we have so much going on as both English students and students in general is easy to overlook the conventions of an essay since we've all been writing them for so long.
I incorporated the genre conventions that are not only provided through examples on d2l but also were talked about in class on Friday. I referenced the genre examples when doing my own project so I just had to refer back to them when writing my comment for Alec.
I admired his use of a quote for the intro. I found it to be catching and i made me want to read more, like why is this quote here? What is the significance? I found that to be gutsy and smart.
An Investigation of the Specificity in Political Science Genres by Alec Eulano
Alec's rough cut can be found here
My review comment can be found here
I selected activity 2 and critiqued the genre conventions that Alec used in order to convey/create a Standard college essay. I chose to do this because I felt as though his content was strong but some of the genre conventions were missing.
I think I helped Alec in refining the genre conventions that are so easy to overlook. When we have so much going on as both English students and students in general is easy to overlook the conventions of an essay since we've all been writing them for so long.
I incorporated the genre conventions that are not only provided through examples on d2l but also were talked about in class on Friday. I referenced the genre examples when doing my own project so I just had to refer back to them when writing my comment for Alec.
I admired his use of a quote for the intro. I found it to be catching and i made me want to read more, like why is this quote here? What is the significance? I found that to be gutsy and smart.
Reflection
In this post I will be talking about how this entire project went and I will be assessing my own performance and time management skills. This project, in my opinion, was much more difficult than the last one and I hit way more problems during this process than last and I will be covering those issues in this post.
Audience Questions:
1. What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
Receiving the rubric in class was very helpful for me. After looking over the rubric on Thursday I honestly knew that I was in trouble and would need to commit quite a bit of time to fixing my essay. However, as frustrating as that was, I was very grateful to have seen the rubric in time to make the necessary changes and I believe that that was something that went well during this last week.
2. What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
This is on me but I edited my essay in the word document on my computer instead of the google doc I had posted to my blog so all of the peer review feedback I received was on the draft that I already knew was bad. Additionally, realizing that my essay was worse than I already thought on Thursday was hard because I already had meetings and philanthropy events planned for the weekend so I had to find more time than I had expected in order to finish this project on time. I wish we had received the grading rubric sooner.
3. How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?
Well, next week is a new project so I'm very hopeful going into this next week that it will be smoother sailing than this past week was. I am committed to managing my time better for this next project so this same thing doesn't happen to me again.
4. How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?
I'm honestly not sure. Part of my insecurities around this project are about me just not really being a confident writer to begin with but I'm considerably more worried about this project than I was the last. I knew my QRG was good for project one but at this point I don't know where I stand and I'm very nervous to see how this project works out for me in the end (Grade wise).
Editorial Report Numba Two
In this post, much like me previous post, I will be comparing a section of my rough cut draft and a section of my completed/edited draft. I've hit a lot of speed bumps in this project so my rough cut almost doesn't represent my final copy at all (which is good 'cause my rough cut was not good enough)! I hope that the work I've committed to this projects is conveyed through these posts.
Author Response:
Rough Cut Excerpt:
Another writing form that is used by studio artists is journaling. Journaling, unlike most other genres is not something that is made for public consumption. Much like diary entries journaling allows for artists to get their thoughts and ideas out on paper so they may be able to develop their thoughts into more interesting and complete ideas or even just remember what they were thinking the day before. Krause says that she journals just for herself. She writes notes, memos, and stories that keep her engaged and thinking about her topic. Krause writes in her sketchbook and does not post the sketchbook pages online, they are just for her. Famous artists from the past have also been known to journal. Van Gogh, a very famous French impressionist painter from the late 18oo’s, is now famous for his journal entries. Upon his death in 1890 the artists family and friends claimed his belongings including his journals, since then museums and galleries have coveted the writings as they give a glimpse into the way his mind works. The artist wrote notes to himself when starting new pieces, wrote poems of inspiration, sketched smaller versions of his large paintings and denoted his actions and thoughts as he painted. This form of writing, according to Ms. Krause, is “the most important form of writing an artist can discover”. Ms. Krause also said that “journaling allows me to calm my mind and collect my thoughts, without writing things down I would be lost and I wouldn’t be able to complete my works”. Journaling is a writing form that the public cannot see but we can still appreciate the purpose and intention that journaling evokes.
Edited Excerpt:
Another writing form that is used by studio artists is journaling. Journaling, unlike the previous genres is not made for public consumption. Much like diary entries journaling allows for artists to get their thoughts and ideas out on paper so they may be able to develop their thoughts into more interesting and complete ideas. Janelle Krause, a studio artist, says that she journals just for herself. She writes notes, memos, and stories that keep her engaged and thinking about her topic. Krause writes in her sketchbook and does not post the sketchbook pages online, they are, as she said in an interview, just for her (Krause, Personal Interview). Famous artists from the past have also been known to journal. Van Gogh, a very famous French impressionist painter from the late 18oo’s, is now famous for his journal entries. Upon his death in 1890 the artist’s family claimed his belongings including his journals and since that time museums and galleries have coveted the writings as they give a glimpse into the life of the artist (“Vincent Van Gogh Gallery”. Van Gogh wrote notes to himself when starting new pieces, wrote poems of inspiration, sketched smaller versions of his large paintings and denoted his actions and thoughts as he painted (“Publication History”). This genre, because it is not written for the public contains no appeals of credibility or logic but does appeal to emotion. Van Gogh wrote poems, songs, and notes to accompany his many sketches in his journal and every entry was dedicated to a different person much like a letter. Van Gogh’s most famous entry is dedicated to his long-time girlfriend. The entry is a love poem accompanied by a small painting of himself. The poem is inherently emotional as it is dedicated to the love of his life and appeals to the emotions of the reader as they are able to feel the intimacy of the couple’s love third hand. The genre of journaling, though abstract and hard to interpret, is the most intimate form of writing in the art field and appeals to human emotion in a way that no other genre can.
Audience Questions:
1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?
Here the differences are slightly less obvious. The content is different because it explicitly states the rhetorical device that is used, pathos. This is basically the assignment, literally to talk about the rhetorical device and I didn't have it anywhere. Can you believe that? Additionally, I use more direct and pertinent information concerning Van Gogh's journal entries and I aimed to be less repetitive with pronouns.
Author Response:
Rough Cut Excerpt:
Another writing form that is used by studio artists is journaling. Journaling, unlike most other genres is not something that is made for public consumption. Much like diary entries journaling allows for artists to get their thoughts and ideas out on paper so they may be able to develop their thoughts into more interesting and complete ideas or even just remember what they were thinking the day before. Krause says that she journals just for herself. She writes notes, memos, and stories that keep her engaged and thinking about her topic. Krause writes in her sketchbook and does not post the sketchbook pages online, they are just for her. Famous artists from the past have also been known to journal. Van Gogh, a very famous French impressionist painter from the late 18oo’s, is now famous for his journal entries. Upon his death in 1890 the artists family and friends claimed his belongings including his journals, since then museums and galleries have coveted the writings as they give a glimpse into the way his mind works. The artist wrote notes to himself when starting new pieces, wrote poems of inspiration, sketched smaller versions of his large paintings and denoted his actions and thoughts as he painted. This form of writing, according to Ms. Krause, is “the most important form of writing an artist can discover”. Ms. Krause also said that “journaling allows me to calm my mind and collect my thoughts, without writing things down I would be lost and I wouldn’t be able to complete my works”. Journaling is a writing form that the public cannot see but we can still appreciate the purpose and intention that journaling evokes.
Edited Excerpt:
Another writing form that is used by studio artists is journaling. Journaling, unlike the previous genres is not made for public consumption. Much like diary entries journaling allows for artists to get their thoughts and ideas out on paper so they may be able to develop their thoughts into more interesting and complete ideas. Janelle Krause, a studio artist, says that she journals just for herself. She writes notes, memos, and stories that keep her engaged and thinking about her topic. Krause writes in her sketchbook and does not post the sketchbook pages online, they are, as she said in an interview, just for her (Krause, Personal Interview). Famous artists from the past have also been known to journal. Van Gogh, a very famous French impressionist painter from the late 18oo’s, is now famous for his journal entries. Upon his death in 1890 the artist’s family claimed his belongings including his journals and since that time museums and galleries have coveted the writings as they give a glimpse into the life of the artist (“Vincent Van Gogh Gallery”. Van Gogh wrote notes to himself when starting new pieces, wrote poems of inspiration, sketched smaller versions of his large paintings and denoted his actions and thoughts as he painted (“Publication History”). This genre, because it is not written for the public contains no appeals of credibility or logic but does appeal to emotion. Van Gogh wrote poems, songs, and notes to accompany his many sketches in his journal and every entry was dedicated to a different person much like a letter. Van Gogh’s most famous entry is dedicated to his long-time girlfriend. The entry is a love poem accompanied by a small painting of himself. The poem is inherently emotional as it is dedicated to the love of his life and appeals to the emotions of the reader as they are able to feel the intimacy of the couple’s love third hand. The genre of journaling, though abstract and hard to interpret, is the most intimate form of writing in the art field and appeals to human emotion in a way that no other genre can.
Audience Questions:
1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?
Here the differences are slightly less obvious. The content is different because it explicitly states the rhetorical device that is used, pathos. This is basically the assignment, literally to talk about the rhetorical device and I didn't have it anywhere. Can you believe that? Additionally, I use more direct and pertinent information concerning Van Gogh's journal entries and I aimed to be less repetitive with pronouns.
2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?
Same as the last post really, this paragraph has the in-text citations that are needed in a Standard College Essay. I also aimed to keep my sentence structure more varied to keep the essay from sounding super boring.
Editorial report
In this post I will be comparing a section of my rough cut draft and a section of my completed/editted draft. I had a lot of speed bumps in this project the my rough cut almost doesn't represent my final copy at all (which is good 'cause my rough cut was not good enough)!
Author Response:
Rough Cut Excerpt-
Art historians use writing as a way to inform others of the information they have uncovered, studied, or find interesting. Becky Black, a doctoral student at the University of Arizona, uses writing to produce articles in hopes of getting published. Art historians like Ms. Black write articles on a array of topics from current art to early pieces that are believed to be created before the first century. They use writing as their own form of creation as a way to insert their own opinions and interests into pieces that have already been formed by someone else. Ms. Black has had articles published on the topic of art history with a focus on gender issues in modern art. In an interview with Ms. Black the art historian said:
“When writing an article you have to be conscious of who you’re writing for but you also have to be conscious of what you want people to get from it. If you write to please everybody you will get the attention of nobody, people like to be challenged and encouraged to think.”
Ms. Black claimed that writing an article is a great way to express your own thoughts and receive feedback from a large array of people.
Edited Excerpt-
Art historians use writing as a way to inform others of the information they have uncovered, studied, or find interesting and a large part of this writing is governed by the ability to study and observe art and conduct further research. Becky Black, a doctoral student at the University of Arizona, claims that in order to learn more about art and art history one has to obtain funding for their research through the writing of grant proposals (Black, Personal Interrview). A grant proposal by definition is “a formal proposal submitted to a government or civilian entity that outlines a proposed project and shows budgetary requirements and requests monetary assistance in the form of a grant” meaning that the author is proposing a research opportunity and requesting funding at the same time (“Grant Proposals”). Writing a good proposal is difficult as the author, the art historian, must not only convince the potential donor that their idea is valid and worthwhile but must also assure that the money will be well spent and worth spending. Writing a proposal, because of these two purposes must appeal to the reader, the donor, in two key ways: appeal to the donor’s logical side as the author explains why the money is needed and convince the donor that the author is a credible source who can be trusted and believed in. When an art historian uses logos they are relying on facts and numbers, analytical information, to persuade the reader (Jacobsen, Pawlowski, and Miller 183-184). In the case of a grant proposal logos is used to explain the purpose of the project as well as who it will effect and where the money will go. In a sample grant proposal that outlines the “Read to Succeed!” plan logic based appeals are used vividly to explain why the plan needs to be enacted as well as what will happen and how much each individual portion will cost (Hazelton, “Sample Grant Proposal”). The proposal causes the reader think analytically and provides the potential donor with the necessary facts. The other appeal, ethos, the appeal to credibility, is how the author gains the donors trust without ever directly meeting them. After all of the logical numbers and plans are established the author must still gain the trust of the donor by proving their credibility and character (Jacobsen, Pawlowski, and Miller 181-182). In the sample grant proposal ethos is used in the cover letter as well as in the project abstract section. In the cover letter the author appeals to the humanity of the donor as the writer talks about herself as a professional who has studied her craft for some time and is interested in pursuing new research that she can call her own (Hazelton). After establishing her prominence and experience in her field she explains why her project is different and groundbreaking and references her knowledge of the field in order to produce a convincing proposal. Art historians writing in this genre focus on making themselves appear credible, worthy and knowledgeable in order to obtain the resources needed to share their discoveries with the greater public.
Audience Questions:
1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?
Well the most obvious change is the length. Not that longer is better but in this case it is. Before seeing the rubric I believed that the rhetorical devices were to be conveyed not directly addressed, I was wrong. I really think that the most major difference between the edited and unedited versions is that the edited version follows the assignment while the first draft doesn't.
2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?
Author Response:
Rough Cut Excerpt-
Art historians use writing as a way to inform others of the information they have uncovered, studied, or find interesting. Becky Black, a doctoral student at the University of Arizona, uses writing to produce articles in hopes of getting published. Art historians like Ms. Black write articles on a array of topics from current art to early pieces that are believed to be created before the first century. They use writing as their own form of creation as a way to insert their own opinions and interests into pieces that have already been formed by someone else. Ms. Black has had articles published on the topic of art history with a focus on gender issues in modern art. In an interview with Ms. Black the art historian said:
“When writing an article you have to be conscious of who you’re writing for but you also have to be conscious of what you want people to get from it. If you write to please everybody you will get the attention of nobody, people like to be challenged and encouraged to think.”
Ms. Black claimed that writing an article is a great way to express your own thoughts and receive feedback from a large array of people.
Edited Excerpt-
Art historians use writing as a way to inform others of the information they have uncovered, studied, or find interesting and a large part of this writing is governed by the ability to study and observe art and conduct further research. Becky Black, a doctoral student at the University of Arizona, claims that in order to learn more about art and art history one has to obtain funding for their research through the writing of grant proposals (Black, Personal Interrview). A grant proposal by definition is “a formal proposal submitted to a government or civilian entity that outlines a proposed project and shows budgetary requirements and requests monetary assistance in the form of a grant” meaning that the author is proposing a research opportunity and requesting funding at the same time (“Grant Proposals”). Writing a good proposal is difficult as the author, the art historian, must not only convince the potential donor that their idea is valid and worthwhile but must also assure that the money will be well spent and worth spending. Writing a proposal, because of these two purposes must appeal to the reader, the donor, in two key ways: appeal to the donor’s logical side as the author explains why the money is needed and convince the donor that the author is a credible source who can be trusted and believed in. When an art historian uses logos they are relying on facts and numbers, analytical information, to persuade the reader (Jacobsen, Pawlowski, and Miller 183-184). In the case of a grant proposal logos is used to explain the purpose of the project as well as who it will effect and where the money will go. In a sample grant proposal that outlines the “Read to Succeed!” plan logic based appeals are used vividly to explain why the plan needs to be enacted as well as what will happen and how much each individual portion will cost (Hazelton, “Sample Grant Proposal”). The proposal causes the reader think analytically and provides the potential donor with the necessary facts. The other appeal, ethos, the appeal to credibility, is how the author gains the donors trust without ever directly meeting them. After all of the logical numbers and plans are established the author must still gain the trust of the donor by proving their credibility and character (Jacobsen, Pawlowski, and Miller 181-182). In the sample grant proposal ethos is used in the cover letter as well as in the project abstract section. In the cover letter the author appeals to the humanity of the donor as the writer talks about herself as a professional who has studied her craft for some time and is interested in pursuing new research that she can call her own (Hazelton). After establishing her prominence and experience in her field she explains why her project is different and groundbreaking and references her knowledge of the field in order to produce a convincing proposal. Art historians writing in this genre focus on making themselves appear credible, worthy and knowledgeable in order to obtain the resources needed to share their discoveries with the greater public.
Audience Questions:
1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?
Well the most obvious change is the length. Not that longer is better but in this case it is. Before seeing the rubric I believed that the rhetorical devices were to be conveyed not directly addressed, I was wrong. I really think that the most major difference between the edited and unedited versions is that the edited version follows the assignment while the first draft doesn't.
2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?
My form is now lengthy but actually includes the genres that we were asked to present. In the first draft I was so distracted by trying to just focus on my interviewee that the genre conventions of a SCE got lost. I now have the in text citations and Works Cited page that the first draft was lacking.
Sunday, March 13, 2016
Open Post to Peer Reviewers
I still have a lot to work on! There is definitely a lot of detail that needs to be added, especially to the 2nd paragraph and the conclusion needs to be written. I'm writing about how art professionals use writing and focusing on the genres of blogging, article writing, and journaling.
You can find my essay here
You can find my essay here
Reflection
In this blog post I will be reflecting on the Production process that we have just completed. I will be answering the audience questions posed after writing the first rough cut of my Standard College Essay for Project 2.
Audience Questions:
What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?
How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?
Audience Questions:
What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
- I feel very confident in my last body paragraph. I think I covered and conveyed the intimacy and personal nature of journal entry writing. Janelle, my interviewee, said that she is the only person who has ever seen her journal entries in her sketchbook and I think I made that very clear. I also really like the connection to Van Gogh as it adds credibility and helps explain the genre further.
What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
- My first body paragraph needs work. After writing my rough cut and looking back at my outline I realize that my paragraph doesn't even kind of represent what I wanted to write according to my outline. There is A LOT of info that needs to be added concerning genre conventions of Article writing and a lot of repetitive information that needs to be taken out in order to make the paragraph more informational and less boring and repetitive
How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?
- I think there is nowhere to go but up! I definitely have some stuff to work on so I won't be bored which is good! And I do know what I need to do and what I need to fix and additionally, I do know how to fix it so I am hopeful going into this next week.
How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?
- I'm feeling better about it. I have reread the assignment a few times and I have always felt it's a bit vague (which is intentional so people will be creative) but it did confuse me at first. Now, after looking at other people's outlines I feel as though I am on the right track and moving in the right direction. I am still a bit worried that my project is boring but I know I have the time and the talent to figure that all out.
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